I’ll
continue with Squishing Whistle Pigs for the time being. Last week’s post went
over well, so I’m curious to know how the next few weeks will go. Squishing
Whistle Pigs is a bit of a dark read, at least at first. The main character is
heartbroken and rock-bottom with depression, struggling to find a hand hold on
spirituality. I hope you all know how appreciative I am for you taking time out
of your weekend to visit my blog to read and comment.
These are the next six following last week’s post.
Wasn’t time to say goodbye or to ask why. My mind hovers on an image of her face, wanting to picture her the way she was when we were in love. My emotions have become dull like the knife that unwillingly cut my breakfast, though I smother with the hash browns under sausage gravy.The wind is bitter this spring. The snow has lingered longer than past years. Honeysuckles bloomed late and the hummingbirds have moved on.
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visit the official site for more great writers for Six Sentence Sunday, and
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On
a side note, I’ve relaunched my personal blog; It’s going to be a hoot, based
on my abstract life and all the dumb stuff people do, namely myself. I hope you’ll
visit and have a good laugh at my expense. The Karma Chronicles.
13 comments:
I love your use of descriptive phrases in this six. They're unique and do an excellent job of setting the scene. Nice, solid six.
You have a dark dramatic talent, Mel. This makes me sigh. Deep, heavy sighs. I like the symbolism, the bitter wind, lingering snow and the reference to moving on at the end. - I'm really curious about your character coming in contact with spirituality and what consequences this might have for his inner life. I hope I'll get to read about that one of those Sundays. :)
You alway have such a way with words. Love the reference to breakfast! Great 6 Mel!
A six that conjures an emotional reaction. Beautiful but grim, and so well done. I especially love the last paragraph. Your prose is always amazing!
As always, your prose flips the switch of empathy. Nicely done.
Writing about lost love can turn into such a cliche collection of words. But you're avoiding that in an amazing way. "The wind is bitter this spring..." Haunting.
Nice six, M.L. :-)
Love the way you describe the emotions - a dull knife... You really know how to put a sense into perspective. Great 6!
Your writing is most poignat with a hint of a good chuckle;-)
Very emotional; you create a deep sense of empathy here. Well done.
Beautiful and lush, yet emotionally muffled.
The title, by the way, has my complete attention!
Strong characterization here, and effective interplay of good details with visceral emotional reality. Great stuff!
(Oh, and thanks so much for featuring SOULRAZOR on your page. I'm blushing! ;D)
Thank you all for the inspiring comments! I appreciate it very much. Your comments are all so flattering. Your kind words mean a great deal.
Dana: He tends to get a bit sarcastic about things. It's an amazing feeling to know you're so taken with the story; that's a wonderful compliment. I'll stick with Squishing Whistle Pigs for the next several weeks, although, If you would like to read the full piece, I would be ok with that. I would send it to you if you like. It's a short read, roughly 17 pages. I'll need to tweak it a little before I send it so, say the word. ;)
Teresa: I was told so many times during my college days that my work was clicheic, so I strive to avoid it as much as possible.
i'm glad you like the title Sarah. The title came to me before I had a plot for it. That was a challenge. ;)
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